Reflection on Failed Poem

Help me understand why this poem is not working and what to salvage.

Problem poem:
{{poem}}

What I was trying to achieve: {{intention}}
Where it feels broken: {{problem_area}}

Reflection process:

1. **Diagnosis:** What specifically is failing? (clarity, emotion, sound, structure)

2. **Root cause:** Is the problem in conception or execution?

3. **Salvage assessment:** 
   - Which lines have life?
   - Which images work?
   - What can be cut entirely?

4. **Reconstruction options:**
   - Minor revision path
   - Major restructuring path
   - Start fresh using only the best elements

5. **Lesson:** What does this failure teach about my craft?

Provide concrete next steps.