Dialogue Realism Pass

Apply a realism pass to this dialogue:

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REALISM AUDIT:

1. NATURAL SPEECH PATTERNS
- Add interruptions where appropriate
- Include half-starts and corrections
- Vary sentence completeness
- Remove perfect grammar from casual speech

2. OVERLAPPING CONCERNS
- Characters should talk past each other sometimes
- Not every question gets a direct answer
- Add non-sequiturs that reveal character

3. SUBTEXT LAYER
- Where are they being too direct?
- What would they actually say vs. mean?

4. INDIVIDUAL VOICE
- Does each character sound distinct?
- Are verbal tics consistent?

5. PHYSICAL REALITY
- Add "um," "uh" sparingly
- Include physical interruptions (eating, looking away)
- Reference surroundings naturally

Provide the rewritten dialogue with annotations explaining changes. Avoid over-correcting into unreadable naturalism.